Question

Practice with Style Recommendations 6-10
6. Avoid noun strings.
7. Avoid unclear pronoun reference.
8. Use parallel constructions.
9. Construct your paragraphs according to the basic principles of academic writing.
10. Use transition words and phrases appropriately.

How can these sentences be reduced or made clearer?
1. The human resource development project newspaper deadline is Friday at 4:00.
2. Because Senator Martin is less interested in the environment than in economic development, he sometimes neglects it.
3. The tribes emphasized survival, aid, and being responsible for one another.
1. Coach Thompson was a brilliant strategist, a caring mentor, and friend.
2. Formerly, science was taught by the textbook method, while now the laboratory method is employed.
3. When Jim’s son was a year old, he decided to get married again.
4. John worked in a national forest last summer, which may be his career choice.
5. The soldiers burned a refugee camp as a result of the earlier attack. This was the cause of the war.
6. It was raining hard; on the other hand, I went outside for a long walk because I needed the exercise.
7. American women have been dyeing their hair for years. American men, nevertheless, only recently started coloring theirs.