I started my state primary school, when I was seven and went to there - went there правильно, без предлога until I was - until I became лучше I passed the EGE and are then - лишнее слово I study full-time and pay for tuition fee - лишний предлог I live in a home because I come from Moscow - I live at home because I am from Moscow время тут неуместно After I graduated from university, I get a Bachelor's degree - When I graduate from the University I will get a Bachelor's degree After that we are going to have winter holidays. - здесь лучше взять конструкцию будущего времени we will have
Today I wore a cast on his left hand - Сегодня я носил гипс на левой руке. Yesterday I broke my leg - Вчера я сломал ногу. At the training I broke 2 fingers - на тренировке я сломал два пальца. I gained a concussion - я заработал сотрясение мозга.
Или если тебе нужно один текст о травме, то вот. I play football for 4 years and yesterday I got a leg injury. The doctors said that surgery is not needed. But I think still in football I will not return - Я занимаюсь футболом 4 года и вчера я получил травму ноги. Врачи сказали, что операция не нужна. Но я думаю, что все равно в футбол я уже не вернусь.
until I was - until I became лучше
I passed the EGE and are then - лишнее слово
I study full-time and pay for tuition fee - лишний предлог
I live in a home because I come from Moscow - I live at home because I am from Moscow
время тут неуместно
After I graduated from university, I get a Bachelor's degree - When I graduate from the University I will get a Bachelor's degree
After that we are going to have winter holidays. - здесь лучше взять конструкцию будущего времени we will have